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The initial image is instantly haunting, and oy, I read the piece over a few times, perhaps picking out the seeds of image and structure. So brava on that right ...

Ahoy there. You've clearly got a world in mind here, and you've set the scene for a rather epic confrontation and battle. I liked the idea of the 'Fire Wraith.' ...

Hullo! You've picked a neat meditation, and a brilliant setting, for pondering life/death/beauty. Memory, and a mountain, make a fair frame for pulling the reader into quite a lot of ...

Ahoy again Snoink, Oy huzzah! I particularly enjoyed this chapter's headlong thrust: You built tension in the beginning and then let it all fall over the cliff into the close ...

Hey. I like the framing. You've set up the skeleton of a short that neatly loops back on its themes, and plays them both a)psychologically and b)materially. So you've got ...

Er, this had excellent eerie overtones--and undertones--and made me think of a mashup of Tim Burton, Ed Gorey, and Roald Dahl. I picture it being part of a collection of ...

Oy, I'm just spliffy to see this. It made me laugh out loud in the coffee house I'm working from. My only review-esque comments are formatting and phrasing: in format: ...

Ahoy Snoink! It was excellent to see your fiction on YWS. So, of course, I read it. I'd love to offer line edit, but I'd want to know what stage ...

Oy, this is lovely play with formatting, and bravo on breaking and making the flow with page space. 'Metronome' was a neat touch in diction, too, polysyllabic against your shorter ...

There's something whimsical to this, and yet the whimsy is set off by an edge. I want to say intuitively it is a rim-of-winter poem: Still flashing fire, but beneath ...

Oy, somehow that wildly evoked Bob Dylan for me. Which is absolutely a compliment. I had a lot fun reading, especially tripping over lines or neologisms that made me wonder ...

Hey Mageheart. The tension of interior conflict in the poem is a great launching point. The inner stanzas are strongest here, because they describe something tangible. Poetry "tells the truth ...

Hullo! Quick bullet points: --Well done moving the plot with dialogue --Very much appreciated that James and Clan had unique voices; even with dialogue tags, you could distinguish them --I ...

Hullo! First off, a broad impression: I was drawn in immediately by the tangibility of the scene. With the first paragraph, you gave me both an impression of Aura and ...

Hullo! To start off, you hit a strong chord with your final stanza. I also love the concept of origami-as-image. It is a tight, specific, layered metaphor that has the ...